Friday, March 24, 2006

His Universe

My first poetic piece:

HIS UNIVERSE

I just can not take my mind off
and feel so embellished
and so fortunate
that I have him
that how he greets me
off the work,
recommence our day
cold winter out
flurrries dancing in the wind
two arms wide open
waiting to embrace his universe
his universe, me

7 comments:

Geo said...

are u sure ths comes under the 'poetic piece' tag? i wudnt know as i am an illiterate idiot when it comes to poetry...

what abt calling it a love note?

and sending it to 'him' ;_)
bhu ha ha ha ha ha ha ha

monu said...

agree with geo

a love note ;)...

(venus expectation is that "he" will view this blog ... ;)

venus said...

AL:
Thank you very much for your motivational poem :)
I've started my new job from today, and I know it's gonna be more demanding than before, but I will def try to keep it up!

Geo:
ha ha ha
What should I say?
it's a pretty self revealing poem, ur,love note:)

btw, I believe in direct approach, no indirect approach, I don't need a poem to pursue him ;)

monu:
dude, u're very wrong here,
venus does not expect "him" to visit here, as venus is a firm believer in a direct approach :)

venus said...

Thank you very much Alex!

-Poison- said...

:) congrats!

on being a complete universe..

venus said...

Poison:
Thank you for your wishes, but I'm not sure if I'm a complete universe :)

Khakra said...

if mummy pappaa don't approve of this poem and think his universe means watching oprah winfrey 24/7, hire me and i'll convince them that they should join into the fun and they'll find indian soaps there too in case they want drama